HW 17 - Outline suggestions

Chris:

Its good that you have the evidence you are going to use already planned out. It shows that you know what you want to focus on. i suggest that you do the first thesis because your arguments support that one the most. As for your intro i think you should introduce the advancement timeline of technology so the reader can get an understanding of why your topic is important .

also i think your paper would be stronger if you use more evidence that tie into your arguments, like other peoples blogs or movies you've seen( i know you always hit up that HBO channel) .

Anais:

i feel like this outline is too broad so i cant really get a strong feel of your topic and what you want to write about.

on the bright side i like that you have a good strong thesis now the rest of your worries should be trying to find enough evidence to back it up.

goodluckk.

HW 16 - Big paper outline 1

Topic: How books such as feed and movies like wall-e are prediction the destruction of our future generation.

T1a: Introduction of allegory
T1b: Introduction to the advancement of technology
T2: story line of feed
T3: Few paragraphs on different connections
T4: Story line of wall-e
T5: Few paragraphs on connections

Conclusion: over all trend and where is technology heading